Elizabeth Moray
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She Hides Behind The Mask She Calls Herself
Joined: Dec 2007
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« Thread Started on Dec 15, 2007, 8:25pm » | |
Okay, so we all know how hard it can be to reply to someone in two paragraphs but flower up the language. Here's an example;
Elizabeth sighed.
These two words can easily be changed to;
Elizabeth let the heavy breath escape from her pink lips.
See how easy it is to take two words and make it sound better and take up more space. Also, this give more information about what the sigh sounded like, let's face it a sigh can be used in so many contexts. To lengthen that even further you could write about her emotions, why she was sighing. This could be something like;
Elizabeth let the heavy breath escape from her pink lips. This consistant reoccurance was starting to annoy her very much. Those dirty muddy footprints were smudged all over the normally clean marble floor. She shook her head lightly and let her blonde curls fall around her face. She could feel the frustration growing in her, she hated mess. She studied the footprints closer, figuring out that they were female footprints from the size of them. She wanted to hurt the person who was leaving these footprints around, they were around everywhere, like a trail to something. She needed to find the person creating these and stop them from making them anymore.
Also, there are a few things that a lot of sites change.
Thoughts are in italics
Non-playable-characters are in bold
And all speech is in "speech marks"
Simple, no?
Cannons
Okay, so when you heard the word Cannons, you start to get a little peeved that there is someone trying to tell you who to play on a site where there are no characters really, but there are only a few cannons. But also I have given cannon last names to keep the number more even. Some of them I will state the role in the family as there will be families in this home, but others will only have one member and it is up to you if the rest of the family is deceased or still alive.
Secret Word 3: "and shall be lifted...Nevermore."
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